Tuesday 25 March 2014

Persuasive Writing by Abdirahman 6MC



Wednesday 12th February
L.O. To write a letter using the features of persuasive text.

Ward End Primary School
Ingleton Road
Birmingham

Dear Mr Jones,
I am a year 6 student and I am writing to complain about the lack of school trips on offer at Ward End Primary School.
There have been no trips and the few trips we have had; the standards have been poor.
As a result of this, a number of Year 6 pupils are getting bored with their lessons.  
We want you to do something about it.  Our SATs are coming up and we can’t do our SATs without knowing anything. 
Unfortunately, a small number of children are not coming to school because it’s not fun and the learning is starting to get poor.  This is also impacting on the school’s attendance figures.
I hope you have understood our needs and you can do something to change this.
We look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely
Abdirahman

6 comments:

  1. You have certainly put forward a good case. Will see what we can do!

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  2. A very good piece of work, hopefully we can see what we can do! - Mrs Rose Headteacher

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  3. Lovely writing Abdirahman but I dispute the lack of trips- what about our lovely trip to Curdworth last year and also today's trip! I hope you all ahd a good day.

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  4. Well done Abdirahman - this is a very convincing case! In reality though, Year 6 have many trips to enjoy this year - including our recent visit to Shugborough Hall. Mr Jones.

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  5. nicework abdi

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