Persuasive Writing by Humza 6PJ

Tuesday 25^th February 2014

L.O. To write an effective persuasive letter.

Dear Sir,

I strongly believe that a motorway would be detrimental to the village of Curdworth.

First and foremost, if a motorway is built in Curdworth  , noise will become louder and carbon monoxide will increase . Therefore, there will be more sickness, such as asthma, in the area . Would you like it if children were suffering with asthma?

Only a fool would think of building a motorway in Curdworth.   A lot of sickness will take place, because of carbon monoxide.  There is a school risk of the school closing down as well, because of the sickness.

The churches will close down as well, because the people who work there might be sick or die and less people would work there, would you like the people to die in Curdworth? 

The motorway will make more traffic and gas, which would kill people in Curdworth . If there are a lot of motorways,  if there are so many traffics , then a lot of sickness will appear in Curdworth . Would you like everyone to be sick?

As a result, the workers should not build a motorway in Curdworth.  Curdworth could be destroyed, FOREVER !  People do not want to suffer asthma, breathing problems and sickness. Do you want to destroy Curdworth, forever?  

Your Sincerely Humza Ali 

Persuasive Writing by Safyaan 6PJ

Tuesday 25th february 2014

Lo.To write a letter using features of persuasive writing

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am a student from year 6 and I’m complaining about the slogan

‘I’m loving it’,it should have a capital ‘I’ at the start.

I passionately believe,that the ‘I’ in the slogan ‘I’m loving it’ should have a 

capital letter because it is the start of a sentence .

Also, in many slogans you usually see capital letters at the start of it

like the ‘British’ slogan has a capital letter at the start. One person said ‘ohh what a terrible mistake they made in there slogan’

As a result of this, 90% of children agree with my statement. Children’s parents want children 

educated properly, but you have not demonstrated good punctuation in your slogan. 

You need to change it, to promote good English because a lot of people look at your slogan.

 This is your opportunity to save your world wide reputation, I trust  you’ll make the right decision.

Yours Faithfully

By Safyaan Javid

Persuasive Writing by Abdirahman 6MC

Wednesday 12^th February

L.O. To write a letter using the features of persuasive text.

Ward End Primary School

Ingleton Road

Birmingham

Dear Mr Jones,

I am a year 6 student and I am writing to complain about the lack of school trips on offer at Ward End Primary School.

There have been no trips and the few trips we have had; the standards have been poor.

As a result of this, a number of Year 6 pupils are getting bored with their lessons.  

We want you to do something about it.  Our SATs are coming up and we can’t do our SATs without knowing anything. 

Unfortunately, a small number of children are not coming to school because it’s not fun and the learning is starting to get poor.  This is also impacting on the school’s attendance figures.

I hope you have understood our needs and you can do something to change this.

We look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely

Abdirahman